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To show the judge your now-tormented soul,
      You keep your gaze as blank as one can be.
The witness said that you were white and whole
       And withered only after meeting me.

Described by Mother as a precious flow’r
      That bloomed in beauty ev’ry passing day,
They say that I took but a single hour
      To steal your sacred innocence away.

But I would argue it had fled years past
      Before my hands could ever reach your skin,
For where can any innocence yet last
      Where one is feeding darkness deep within?

Alas, I know that this case you will win,
      Although ’twas you who begged for us to sin.
For my "something new." How I even came up with this poem's subject is beyond me.

Oh, and if you're thinking of writing a sonnet, it's hard as heck. But the sense of accomplishment I'm feeling right now is a nice reward. This poem saw hours of editing before it ever made it here...I'm hoping that Shakespeare isn't rolling over in his grave right now.

Part of the dark atmosphere no doubt came from what I was listening to at the time - XCVII by How Like a Winter. They recite one of Shakespeare's sonnets in the song. I was hoping that channeling his spirit would help me with iambic pentameter, but I don't think it made it any easier XD
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mugshotpro Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
So very lovely. more of these and your on your way to being a poet.
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Doreikage Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009  Student Artist
Wow, thank you :D
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Nomisluck Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2009  Hobbyist
Well it sounds deep 8D
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Mewshi Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2009
it sounds very nice, and I know nothing about sonnets but it totally sounds very good to me :3
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Doreikage Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2009  Student Artist
thanks! I'm glad it wasn't too creepy for you XD
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Mewshi Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2009
Haha, did you get a chance to look at my task 2 submission?

I feel like that is a tad creepier than this xP
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Doreikage Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2009  Student Artist
Just looked at it, I will say it was pretty dark, lol. Very intense in a good way, though!

But most of my regular watchers, especially the ones who know me in real life, have yet to acknowledge that I posted this. And usually they comment on even the crappiest pics XD I fear I scared them off.
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Mewshi Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2009
Nyaaawww >w< thank you. haha

hmmm I have no idea what my usual watchers would think. Though I know my friends would like it (we're all creepers like that)

and wow, I wouldn't consider yours all that dark. Certainly got the undertones of it, but shouldn't be enough to scare people off. xD;
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Doreikage Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2009  Student Artist
Lol, you're all creepers? XD
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Mewshi Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2009
Yes, but we take it with pride!
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